the | in character | critique meme

[dedikated]

Have you ever just wanted to tell someone flat-out what you think of them as a person? Does your roommate have this one quirk that drives you up the wall, like dripping apathy all over the kitchen sink? Sometimes all it takes to be the best person you can be is a dose of self-awareness, sometimes what it takes instead is a cluebat to the head... and sometimes they just have a stupid name you can never quite spell right.

For all this and more, have I got the meme for you!

THE LOWDOWN
i. Post a header with your character's name.
ii. Comment in-character to other people's headers. With what? Depends on your CR! Maybe they're a good person and really should keep on keeping on, maybe literally everyone can see they need to suck it up and confess already, maybe they'll change their wicked ways if just one extra person casts aspersions on their pompadour. Bring in examples if you want, as with any helpful critique. Be as creative as you like!
iii. Other characters will comment to yours, no doubt overflowing with well-meaning advice on how to be the best person they can be. Your character is free to respond. Excuse you, maybe despair is still in fashion??
iv. A probably unnecessary reminder, but just remember, this is not a place for OOC crit! There are other, more appropriate channels for that.
v. Here are quick links to the Dreamwidth inbox and recent posted comments page if you want them.

Shamelessly borrowed from empatheias

Comments

Adam Parrish

[unknowable]

[greywaren]

Hot. 10/10 no complaints. Be nicer to yourself. Uh...

[Hm.]

Don't leave.

[unknowable]

I don't think that's true, but your opinion is the only one that matters, so thanks.

Don't leave here, or don't leave ever?

I'm going to college someday.

[greywaren]

It better be.

[Well, this is weird now.]

Here. Ever. I don't know. [Shrug.] I have dreams, sometimes, that you're back in that grave. I'd go crazy if I couldn't check on you, after.

[unknowable]

I'm not going anywhere.

I feel like I should be annoyed that you're so protective, but - I don't know. It's sort of nice. No one's ever wanted me to be safe before.

You can always come in and see me if you're worried.

[greywaren]

I do.

[Wow, creepy-ass backpedaling time.]

-I mean, I don't go in. We just share a fucking balcony. When you leave the curtains open, I can check on you when I go outside to take a breather. [That's not weird. He's not Twilighting this. It's totally normal?]

[unknowable]

As long as you don't come in and sit next to me and touch my hair or anything. I don't care if you see me sleeping. It's gotta be pretty boring, you've seen it enough times.

[Should he be creeped out?? He's totally not.]

[greywaren]

It is boring.

[Defensive, because he doesn't watch or anything, just, you know, makes sure that Adam isn't currently eviscerated or being kidnapped and forced into a coffin. Really, he should be thanked.]

You should just stay with me, or whatever. It would be easier that way. Like how it was after that whole burial thing, when I was crashing on the floor.

[quaerit]

Adam, as your friend, it's my duty to tell you that I think you have a problem.

You're addicted to working too hard. Seriously. We are teenagers, and therefore should be messy. Chores do not need done this badly, believe me.

[unknowable]

Someone needs to make sure the floor isn't covered in socks and things don't grow on our plates. I'm still not convinced Ronan knows how to do laundry.

[quaerit]

I don't even wear socks!

[ ...this will improve his argument about having good fashion sense, surely. ]

And he does, I promise you. He'll get out of it if he can, though. You'd better not let him take advantage.

[unknowable]

Don't your toes ever get cold?

[These are the important questions.]

I don't mind doing stuff for him sometimes. You know I'm not gonna let him push me around too much.

[quaerit]

I wear shoes!

[ Excellent shoes, for the record. ]

And you'd better not. That said, if you can get him doing chores regularly, you're probably a miracle worker.

[unknowable]

I guess that's technically what those are, yeah.

[Dubious.]

He helps out sometimes. I doubt even I have enough magic to manage more than that.

[ampliat]

I'm worried that your future is going to be everything you wanted and nothing you hoped for.

I'd like to see you truly happy.

[unknowable]

I don't know what truly happy would look like for me.

But thank you for wanting that.

[ampliat]

I don't either. But I think you'll find it when you stop chasing it.

Jesus. I sound like my mom.

[unknowable]

Your mom always seemed pretty great. I'm desperately jealous of your family.

I'll keep the cheesy advice in mind.

[ampliat]

You're welcome to join it. I think everyone else would agree.

[unknowable]

I don't think I'm a great fit for families in general. Besides, I'd be the one male psychic. It would be weird.

[fuwatokurage]

You are a good person, so I think that you should try to do something fun!

[unknowable]

I can try. You should too, I think.

[whichend]

You helped me find Arya again and I am forever grateful.

[unknowable]

I would do more than that for you if I could.

[whichend]

You've done far more than you needed. You've done enough.

I hope I can help you, too.